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the feeling of a fool by ~infaredfog:iconinfaredfog:





I lay, awake, trying to sleep
counting the number four
to   the   beats   of   my   bummed   out   soul.

I can't escape her,
yet.

She's tricky, you see;
four she got me,
to be who I'd rather not.

And while I sleep, awake is he
who has to lose and gain a lot.
©2003-2009 ~infaredfog
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Inspired by: trying to fall asleep and not being able to.

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:iconjedi-shar:
Oo... Tricky and yet Oh so cool... Nice work!

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:iconevil-halfwit:
i like!!!! =)

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Yes you are stupid
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P.S. This isn't about a person! Muwahrharharharhr!

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i . aM . fAke
:icondemicalis:
hehe, thats an awesome poem
wo - i wasn' shur if u were taking about a person or if u just were refering to sleep as "her" XD
niceness
~Demi

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:iconinfaredfog:
Thanks for the fav!

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i . aM . fAke
:icondemicalis:
you're welcme... it deservd it - it was good XD

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:iconnihilim:
The second 'four' is intentional, I think,
but was still confusing. I'd suggest dropping
the commas in "her,/yet", and "me,/to".

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